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Btw I understand that your intent is to help writers write better. I respect that. And again I am not an expert such as yourself.

I just don’t get the emphasis on the first line.

That’s my small point.

And mostly I think, from this amateur perspective, coming from an average to bad writer, that one should listen to their voice and tell a good story. I believe that the writing will flow if that basic idea is followed.

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Thank you for this thoughtful exploration of a topic that has often been perplexing to me.

I’ve read many books and have never given the first sentence much thought at all. Is there something wrong with me?

I mean a book has to start somewhere, the first sentence seems like the obvious place.

I just looked up the first sentence of the last two books I’ve read. (Because I had no memory of them) and one other book I read a while back. What remained after reading the books was how remarkable the two individuals in my most recent books were. Not the first line of the book.

In the book “The Rise of Theodore Roosevelt - Edmund Morris” the opening line is a quote of a poem by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow called “The Musicians Tale.”

It’s a Pulitzer prize winning book but their opening line was someone else’s writing.

“Then King Olaf entered,

Beautiful as morning,

Like the sun at Easter

Shone his happy face.”

Then Morris opened with his own writing:

“On the late afternoon of 27 October 1858, a flurry of activity disturbed the genteel quietness of East Twentieth Street, New York City.”

I mean it’s good writing but the whole book was. More importantly I was not left thinking that the book was well written. What I was left thinking was what a remarkable human being Theodore Roosevelt was. I think if a book is well written you don’t even notice the writing. You are engrossed in the story being told. That is the evidence that it was written well. For me anyway.

I believe Bill Bryson is a great writer. His book “At Home” is a favorite of mine. The first line is :

“Some time after we moved into a former Church of England rectory in a village of tranquil anonymity in Norfolk, in the easternmost part of England, I had occasion to go up into the attic to look for the source of a slow but mysterious drip."

That line didn’t capture me or draw me in. It was just someplace to start. Was it written well? Of course. But it was the story told in his “voice” that carried me along.

I also read the John Marshall Harlan Bio “The Great Dissenter” recently.

The first line isn’t what I would consider great:

“They say that history is written by the victors."

I didn’t read that line and give it the cynical take I could have of, oh how original. It was just where the story began. And in the end it was an interesting story that the author told. I didn’t take off points because the opening line wasn’t great. I never thought of it again.

So I don’t get it. For me the first line doesn’t have to be great. It’s what comes after that matters. Was it a good story.

Thats what matters to me anyway.

Mostly what I want is for the writing to not get in the way of the story and to carry me along.

But maybe that’s just me. I’m certainly no expert nor great writer.

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